I LOVED IT IT`S REALLY GOOD! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK

I love the way you've written this poem, i don't think i've come across it before, but it works really well! hope to read more of your poems soon!

Gr8 job on this one hun, i loved it , it was so well written, AWESOME WORK AND WAY TO GO .. ! lol .. check out my new works .. lol I miss hearin from ya and I love ya to death ! .. !
May
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i like it 4/5

that one was good, but i think 'Adam's Rib' was better. still great though!

wow, i didn't know anyone could make the story of adam and eve this intresting
excellent piece of work
xox

how sweet i love it!

bueatiful poem. keep it up

I loved the poem, slight critique (If you do not mind it from somebody who is rather naff at poetry) is that the last line of the first stanzas repition of Ice chops up the flow a bit,

good work.

grate poem i loved it well done.

Jacs
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Extremely fluid and eloquent style, loved it.

Excellent poem. I'm not one to be religious, but I must say, this poem has soo much truth in it. Great job on incorporating two concepts that contradict themselves.

Take Care,
Renee

We were tired of getting ice, while others got the cream

that was my favorite line

i do like the message of this poem as once again im not religious but i still got it so good job

Ok so i saw you said this was your favorite poem and that you have it memorized, and i such at memorization so i decided to come check it out!

beautiful poem! i love it!

"I felt warm as she gave to me the illusion of affection
She felt safe as I gave to her the illusion of protection" those lines were awesome to show that people do things for different reasons, they just really stuck out to me! a job very well done!

~Jacklyn

Awww it's great as always! I couldn't ever write a piece like that - i hope i'm as good a writer as you one day!

I can't believe all of your poems are 4.9... sigh... don't they round up here??????!!!! haha, anyways, i'm straying off topic. this is a beautiful piece. keep writing! ;D

Just discovering your poems ... and I like what I've been reading. :)

Again, A really great poem. I liked the rhyme scheme you used in this one. You pulled it off pretty good. It was great!! 5/5

`Taleee.

Very nice, love the flow . its a very meaningful poem

Wow, this has to be one of the best ive ever read... the flow of the sentences and the structure seem perfect...
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