i really liked it, i'm just gonna throw out my 2 cents for a second....i think you could have even ended it with the line about keep me alive...instead of keeping me going. I don't know. But either way its amazing and you did a great job writing this. Although it was hard for me to keep the peace and silence with fire trucks swarming the street lol....I hate the cities lol. ANyways i gave visuals reading this, i really liked how you described your bangs blowing. FOr some reason I pictured a little blond boy laying on his back in a field one leg crossed over the other, arms behind his head. ANyways great job writing this.

A very good poem! =) Keep up the good work!

~Grace