This kinda reminds me of mine...the one your commented on...Only yours goes into more details. Yours is amazing. Makes mine look pathetic lol. I really loved the lines:

There is a place, beyond the mortal sight;
A land where the godly angels never dare to take flight

and I loved how you ended this making this dark world the world inwhich your trapped in because you commited sucide. I had great visuals in this, you described this land perfect. I would hate to live here thats for sure. Amazing!!!!

BTW thanks for commenting on my poem :)

That is excellent! All ur emotions just come out soo smoothly in writting! This poem is by far one of your best!!