by Robert Sep 1, 2004
category :
Life, society /
faith, religion
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Fantasitc, short but really got me capture the moment and anylise deep xxx alex xx |
by Jenni Marie
"suppose to feel, |
All in all this is good poem. |
Unlinke your previous two poems, i like this poems structure. i love the rhyming coupletys used and the flow was absoloutley brilliant. The first two lines you instantly tell us what your beliefs are. A good introduction to the poem. Then you go to question beliefs that people do. The messgae your saying is displayed quite strongly in thie read. Then you turn what the poem is syaing around. You say what you believe. It seems like your questioning it, then going to it. It reflects something that many people do. Question there religion and then when learning more they go back to it becuasethey believe its right. A good read. Message displayed strongly. Try using a more vaired punctuation. Keep it up though. xx |
by kelsi
I love love love this poem. |