by Robert Sep 2, 2004
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
When my eyes close I still see, |
by Blissful
Ooo twisted! I loved the ending even though the beginning really didnt capture my attemtion. You over used the word "I" which threw of the flow for me in my opinion. Other than that you expressed yourself nicely and I could imagine everything you were saying. Well done. |
I'm not so sure the "love" category is right for this poem. I agree with Raindrops, it is a bit creepy. |
Dude not to say this is not a nice poem but it belongs more within the creepy side of things dont yea think, other then that i loved the meaning behind the poem - |