Unsure about Us

by Brian King   Sep 3, 2004


I tried to make us work but your so far away
I said I loved you every single day

You're so divine so refined
you beauty makes me fell blind

Everyday my hope becomes fore faded
i remember when your hair was braided

My heart has a huge hole
Once it was filled with your soul

To be with you would be so great
So why the hell do i still wait

Everyday I fall out of place
I just can't wait to see your face

Everyday is so full of pain
I hope these efforts aren't in vein

I don't ever know if I'll be fine
Where the hell is this cloud number nine

I wish you would be with me
But as fate might have it, it may never be

I Hope we are not stuck
to not be with you would indefinitely suck

this is only half of the poem i wrote it and went swimming with it I'm my pocket this is all i could make out

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  • 20 years ago

    by abigail

    hey hun i read your info it says you are only 14 and yet your words mean so much, I myself am only 13 years old and I love to write, even if my writing isn't the greatest which I don't know..but age doesn't matter you feel what you feel and everyone has different opinions. In my opinion you are a great writer and you must have a lot of respect for girls. You rock, never change who you are.

    xoxo love xoxo
    abbie*

  • 20 years ago

    by PnQ Mod Account

    Great Poem, Brian!
    I especially liked these lines:
    I don't ever know if I'll be fine
    Where the hell is this cloud number nine

    countless people have probably wondered that at some point in their life!

  • 20 years ago

    by Gracie Jo

    Nice poem. Keep it up! Take care! =)

    ~Grace

  • 20 years ago

    by Kevin J

    Nice write dude;)

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