I think many of us ask for help along the way with what god expects of us, we just have to be ourselves and live our own lives, don't worry about god too much. Excellent poem once again great flow and word choice 5/5 as usual GG23

I don't like two things about this piece:
- The rhymes are too obvious and expected, they lack originality
- I personally don't like to read poem with religious content.
Other than that, this is really nice, dark poem with good atmosphere within.

I like the story you told in this, I enjoy dark poems. I personally don't like poems with religious content, but it was still good to me. A great read. :]

Tammie

The first line really drew me in on this poem, especially when its halloween lols woooo. Great poem xxx alex xxx

As I'm not religious, I wasn't to keen on this one.

But apart from that, I thought it was nicely written.

The atmosphere you created by your use of imagery was beautifully done, while the flow was good throughout the poem.

I thought this was truelly great, i think many have felt this way before, and you put it into words very well

The ending was good. It was, once again, somewhat forced with an unbalanced flow. I saw a few spelling mistakes and grammatical errors but it is very good at conveying the message. <3

I think this poem would be better if you would ditch the rhyming. It just seems too predictable and expected. As I mentioned in another comment, your poems would be much easier to read if they were broken in stanzas. Also there are a few spelling errors 'dieing' to dying and 'vane' to vain. So with the exception of grammatical errors and such.. it was a really good poem.

Its a bit too normally, you expect it too much.

Its a bit too normally, you expect it too much.