by Robert Sep 4, 2004
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
In the darkness I feel your body by me, |
by Blissful
I could just feel the love you were expressing here. The imagery was beautiful, I could just picture everything clearly. One thing that stood out to me was the last line. It didnt make sense. It seems as its too wordy and you can revise it to make it flow better. Well done. |
by Jenni Marie
Ohhh this is BEAUTIFUL. |
by Lisa
Wow.. |