beautifully written.. you're definetly going on my favourites! i really like the first few lines.. they really stand out.

pretty good. it didn't flow very good sometimes but other then that it was good. 5/5 ~keep it up~

-no more

One "little" thing...
"knowing I have little to show.
Ages gone without little care"
This line doesn't sit right for some reason. Perhaps adding a "so" before the "little" in the first line and replacing the "little" with "a" in the second? Anyway, just a suggestion from an ignorant boy. Otherwise, I liked it very much, well done.

5/5 good job..