by Andrea Sep 9, 2004
category :
Dark, fantasy /
dark, horror
Your father doesn't want you |
by SCARECROW
Well well well... Your mum and mine should form a club, mine does an incredible job making people miserable. |
by jennifer
wow Andrea tough life you leave, keep your head up, you are beautiful.. thank-you for sharing a piece of your soul with us |
i like it!!! |
by JodieWatts
wow i know just what u are tryin to give out in this poem well done amazing talent !!!!!!!!! well done if u have any spare time please check out some of me othr poems !!! well done again 1 xxx |
wow! this is definitely freaky. (in a good way!! ha ha) i hope that ur mom didnt talk down to you like that!!! this was very nice, but one critique i have is: (and idk if you wanted it to sound this way but...) some of ur stanzas vary a little in rhyme scheme and syllable length... consistensy always sounds better... but again.. i didnt know if u WANTED it to come out that way.. well i just thought u might want another comment! i'll read some of ur other poems later when i have time.. b/c they definitely sound interesting!! |