Im sry for what "u know who" has done dawn.

Very artistic in the way you approach explaining and building up the story behind the poem. For me, I would work a little on the ending but obviously this goes down to the author.

I am someone who hates editing my own writing but I think the ending can be stronger.

Your a very talented writer for such a young person, I wished I had this talent at 14. 5/5 - My suggestion is that, so please don't think I'm being mean.

Regards,
Joey