i can tell it was from your heart, you are a good poet...very nice
Lee Nicole

Wow... Excellent! I can feel your frustration and pain in this.

Just a couple "oops" to fix....

Stanza 1, Line 1 - breath should be breathe
Stanza 4, Line 1 - you should be your
Stanza 4, Line 2 - tole should be toll

Great work!

Thanx much...sometimes you just write down what you're thinking and those little errors slip in! Thanx!

Sarah

wow nice poem!!~5