A Rose Stuck Between Two Thorns

by Ben   Sep 11, 2004


You are a rose
That is stuck between
Two different thorns
That may tear you apart
And perhaps forever scar your heart

I hope that you choose
The right thorn
The one that isn't
As sharp as it may seem
I can be the thorn in your dream

Beneath my tough skin
And under my sharp points
Away from my ordinary flaws
If you care to look you will find
A loving heart and a caring mind

If you could only be my rose
My everlasting flower that shan't die
I would cherish you every day, like there's no tomorrow
And hold you close to hear your heart beating next to mine
But this will never happen, because girl, you are way to fine

©2004 Ben.S

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  • 20 years ago

    by Broken Tears

    awesome awesome.... like the idea of the poem to!! cept the last line.. as the fisrt comment said.. it just doesnt fit... but than eagain its a unexpected endin and its kinda coo!!

  • 20 years ago

    by TAinted vįŕťues

    Awesome imagery...the way u used the rose and the thorn was awesome...love to read your poems...very creative and original

  • 20 years ago

    by Not Bulletproof

    Wow, this was awesome Ben! The lines all fit perfectly together and I liked how you used the rose and thorns idea. Very creative. Just two things, I think you mean "scar" instead of "scare" in your first verse, and it was a beauitful poem until the last line..No offence of course..but I think it just..didn't go. That's my opinion though. Otherwise, Great poem, hope to hear more from you soon.
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