by Ben Sep 11, 2004
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
You are a rose |
by Broken Tears
awesome awesome.... like the idea of the poem to!! cept the last line.. as the fisrt comment said.. it just doesnt fit... but than eagain its a unexpected endin and its kinda coo!! |
Awesome imagery...the way u used the rose and the thorn was awesome...love to read your poems...very creative and original |
Wow, this was awesome Ben! The lines all fit perfectly together and I liked how you used the rose and thorns idea. Very creative. Just two things, I think you mean "scar" instead of "scare" in your first verse, and it was a beauitful poem until the last line..No offence of course..but I think it just..didn't go. That's my opinion though. Otherwise, Great poem, hope to hear more from you soon. |