Hey dude...I figured instead of leaving sepereate comments on each pt of this story I'd just read the whole thing leave one comment and a trail of votes:p

You did an awesome job. You have a good imagination. I love story telling poems. You totally held my attention the whole read. I like how you stuck to the poems structure and rhyme scheme and kept to the forward motion of the story...that's not easy. I know this took alot of thought and time, but it was totally worth it in my eyes. I'm impressed. You have alot of talent;)

btw.. after going in the first cave I would have been out..screw that second cave:p