wooowww... that was so deep and dark! a very amazing write, just brilliant. keep up the good work :) x x x

I liked how long your lines are. Sometimes short lines chop up the poem a bit too much, and longer lines can allow a more lyrical sound to the poem. I couldn't tell if you were attempting a formal rhyme scheme, but it didn't seem like you were. I thought it was interesting how effective the title was in revealing more about the poem (catharsis = emotional cleansing) Good work!

now i know were to set my targets ..
thats fookin gr8

Your vernacular style is fantastic!

"I watch the roses bleed their colours disappering into the night"
My favourite line.

I really enjoyed this work...You have a very elliptical style.

Thank you for commenting on
"Dark Angel"

Clatter is there to stay however, as you your suggested word 'flutter' of wings.
It was a play on words.
If my Dark Angel was indeed an angel then yes I would agree. But thats the point, he is not an angel more some form of vampire or devil, hence clatter.
This Angel I wanted him to be is indeed not.

Kind regards
HJ

Wow... it's awesome! =) Welcome to my favorite's list! =) Hehe... take care and keep writing!

~Grace

Brilliant, Ananya. Melodramatic in a good way. The language you use conjures very vivid imagery. It's not just what you read here, but what the poem makes you see. Please don't leave this site!

Where the hell are your votes goin...ave u tried to complain ther admin...

tres interesant. the elipses are nice touches.

wow! that is very deep. i love it!

I really liked this one too, beautiful job!

Another great one xxx

I dont usually write "deep" poems but I like that fact that it is very intelligent and descriptive but not difficult...cause difficult poems agrivate me. Amazing job. 5

This poem left me staring at the computer screen not seeing it... GREAT job

U have ur own style love ur work Keep writing!

i think ive read this poem b4 but mayb i 4got 2 comment well is good keep writtin i luv ur poems

ANOTHER awesome job...I have read a few of your poems before, you are so talented. As always, keep up the great work!

Oh gosh that was beautiful and freaky at the same time! Your use of words was great, and the flow was perfect!!! Man, what can i say? ill give u 5-5 for sure and nothing less!
SatuzKa
p.s im still breathless. that poem was one of the best ive read on this sight, and also so original.

The imagery was awesome. You seem to have a lot of skill with words that I havent seen in a lot of people. Keep it up! :)

Wow, that was an absolutely amazing poem, you use some really great words in it like meandering so well written well done :D

I;ll be honest, I came to this poem with critiqueing in mind, but I couldn't find much wrong with it. P.S. Too many people won't give an honest critique, so, I would like to say thank you. Take care...