Heya- I totally love this poem. Especially this stanza ...
"the holes increasing depth and mothers retire
daughters are broken and sons setting fire"
I just think it's really clever. Keep it up ...!!

haha, cool!

Another great poem. (I'm taking it that Caz is the name of your love because I don't think that you're capitalizing it to replace "cuz" idly.)

I like how the ideas deveolped thoughout, and the ending of this piece was chilling. A poem to inspire action, movement, and yet something holds us back, the indiecision and hesistancy, why are we still waiting....

Jesus, stop me before i go all Hamlet on you.

The point is, the poem was quite well done. Congrats, and keep it up.