by Aken Sol Sep 19, 2004
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
Sand in the hour glass continues to drip, |
by DMG
nice kracky |
by Ali
Aken darling... I liked this one alot... like mr. Allen said the idea of the lines getting smaller is a good one... it works really well. |
by Sean Allen
I like how the lines get progressively shorter towards the end, great use of utilizing the format of the poem in a symbolic gesture. Work on the punctuation though, the flow is a bit confusing in some places due to misplaced commas and such. ex.: |