Another good write, it was very different and unique not like most kids work on here! There was definate structure and flow to it!

What kind of poem is this??

-ann

In my mind's eye I have already begun to see
I am as a Hebrew was to a mighty Pharaoh
Cupid you tainted angel, are you teasing me?

(I didn't fully understand this line...)

But I did like the rest of the poem. A bit different from your rest, but nonetheless interesting to read. You have amazing talent. Great job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Excellent job...i liked how you kept repeating thisd line...
"Cupid, you tainted angel, are you teasing me?"
i loved this poem...5/5.

Another nicely penned piece Michael!!!

Awh, wow, another great poem by you Michael.. Your talent always amazes me.. The descriptions were great, as was everything else! Nicely done! 5/5

WOW. I liked.

The use of repetition in this poem set the piece for me.

My favorite lines ... how could they not be:

Cupid, you tainted angel, are you teasing me?
How could my foolish desire be pleasing thee?

I'd love for you to write a second part - responding to the questions raised, particularly the last. I know most poets like to "leave the questions" as that's all part of the process, but humor me when you get a chance.

If you have already done so, please disregard ... but advise of the title, as I must have overlooked.

You're really talented! Excellent choice of words! Great structure too. well done! I like the way you repeated How could my foolish desire be pleasing thee? 5/5 as always

You're really talented! Excellent choice of words! Great structure too. well done! I like the way you repeated How could my foolish desire be pleasing thee? 5/5 as always

Great poem. The repitition really had a function.

The peom was truly excellent, the words and the flow really stand out and it's so easy to read. I loved the repetition of the two lines over and over again, it really captures the reader. Fantastic job 5/5

I love your writing, I can see from your writing that you are a mature writing. You have motivated me to be a metter writer, so am going to try to become as good or even better than you.. Thanks alot and keep on writing. Im also interested in ur books so am goign to see if i can buy them from one of the local book stores here in Jamaica.

This was really nice, I love the way you used your words to flow through the poem. It was a very nice piece.

Great job.. i love this poem.. the whole poem just breathed a poetic sound and the rhymes were perfect... also the last two lines were the perfect ending especially because of their repitition throughout the poem

keep it up.

I like the messages this piece sends. All the not so subtle hints. The rythm of the rhyme is excellent.
Thank you 4 ur comments.

Its not bad, It is really hard to understand...but I really love the way you wrote it. It has great rythm and i love the way you used the pattern in the last lines.
~clumsy

Very well written and so much real emotion put into it

I really like the flow of this poem, very well written. please vote and comment some of my poems

Another piece in which I can find nothing to criticise I really like your work you are an amazing poet. 5/5

All i can say is...wow