Comments : Infatuation

  • 18 years ago

    by AnnMarie

    Another good write, it was very different and unique not like most kids work on here! There was definate structure and flow to it!

    What kind of poem is this??

    -ann

  • 18 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    In my mind's eye I have already begun to see
    I am as a Hebrew was to a mighty Pharaoh
    Cupid you tainted angel, are you teasing me?

    (I didn't fully understand this line...)

    But I did like the rest of the poem. A bit different from your rest, but nonetheless interesting to read. You have amazing talent. Great job.

    xDarkSuicidex 5.5

  • 18 years ago

    by nobody truly knows me

    Excellent job...i liked how you kept repeating thisd line...
    "Cupid, you tainted angel, are you teasing me?"
    i loved this poem...5/5.

  • 18 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Another nicely penned piece Michael!!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Jessica

    Awh, wow, another great poem by you Michael.. Your talent always amazes me.. The descriptions were great, as was everything else! Nicely done! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    WOW. I liked.

  • 17 years ago

    by Lost Soul 691

    The use of repetition in this poem set the piece for me.

    My favorite lines ... how could they not be:

    Cupid, you tainted angel, are you teasing me?
    How could my foolish desire be pleasing thee?

    I'd love for you to write a second part - responding to the questions raised, particularly the last. I know most poets like to "leave the questions" as that's all part of the process, but humor me when you get a chance.

    If you have already done so, please disregard ... but advise of the title, as I must have overlooked.

  • 17 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    You're really talented! Excellent choice of words! Great structure too. well done! I like the way you repeated How could my foolish desire be pleasing thee? 5/5 as always

  • 17 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    You're really talented! Excellent choice of words! Great structure too. well done! I like the way you repeated How could my foolish desire be pleasing thee? 5/5 as always

  • 17 years ago

    by Fsams

    Great poem. The repitition really had a function.

  • 17 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    The peom was truly excellent, the words and the flow really stand out and it's so easy to read. I loved the repetition of the two lines over and over again, it really captures the reader. Fantastic job 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Hope

    I love your writing, I can see from your writing that you are a mature writing. You have motivated me to be a metter writer, so am going to try to become as good or even better than you.. Thanks alot and keep on writing. Im also interested in ur books so am goign to see if i can buy them from one of the local book stores here in Jamaica.

  • 17 years ago

    by S R P

    This was really nice, I love the way you used your words to flow through the poem. It was a very nice piece.

  • 16 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Great job.. i love this poem.. the whole poem just breathed a poetic sound and the rhymes were perfect... also the last two lines were the perfect ending especially because of their repitition throughout the poem

    keep it up.

  • 16 years ago

    by Mr Rhee

    I like the messages this piece sends. All the not so subtle hints. The rythm of the rhyme is excellent.
    Thank you 4 ur comments.

  • 16 years ago

    by Jessie

    Its not bad, It is really hard to understand...but I really love the way you wrote it. It has great rythm and i love the way you used the pattern in the last lines.
    ~clumsy

  • 16 years ago

    by Kitten

    Very well written and so much real emotion put into it

  • 16 years ago

    by My Mistakes

    I really like the flow of this poem, very well written. please vote and comment some of my poems

  • 16 years ago

    by Adelle

    Another piece in which I can find nothing to criticise I really like your work you are an amazing poet. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by kate

    All i can say is...wow