by AnnMarie
Another good write, it was very different and unique not like most kids work on here! There was definate structure and flow to it! |
In my mind's eye I have already begun to see |
Excellent job...i liked how you kept repeating thisd line... |
Another nicely penned piece Michael!!! |
by Jessica
Awh, wow, another great poem by you Michael.. Your talent always amazes me.. The descriptions were great, as was everything else! Nicely done! 5/5 |
by Jenni Marie
WOW. I liked. |
The use of repetition in this poem set the piece for me. |
by Marc Ortiz
You're really talented! Excellent choice of words! Great structure too. well done! I like the way you repeated How could my foolish desire be pleasing thee? 5/5 as always |
by Marc Ortiz
You're really talented! Excellent choice of words! Great structure too. well done! I like the way you repeated How could my foolish desire be pleasing thee? 5/5 as always |
by Fsams
Great poem. The repitition really had a function. |
The peom was truly excellent, the words and the flow really stand out and it's so easy to read. I loved the repetition of the two lines over and over again, it really captures the reader. Fantastic job 5/5 |
by Hope
I love your writing, I can see from your writing that you are a mature writing. You have motivated me to be a metter writer, so am going to try to become as good or even better than you.. Thanks alot and keep on writing. Im also interested in ur books so am goign to see if i can buy them from one of the local book stores here in Jamaica. |
by S R P
This was really nice, I love the way you used your words to flow through the poem. It was a very nice piece. |
Great job.. i love this poem.. the whole poem just breathed a poetic sound and the rhymes were perfect... also the last two lines were the perfect ending especially because of their repitition throughout the poem |
by Mr Rhee
I like the messages this piece sends. All the not so subtle hints. The rythm of the rhyme is excellent. |
by Jessie
Its not bad, It is really hard to understand...but I really love the way you wrote it. It has great rythm and i love the way you used the pattern in the last lines. |
by Kitten
Very well written and so much real emotion put into it |
by My Mistakes
I really like the flow of this poem, very well written. please vote and comment some of my poems |
by Adelle
Another piece in which I can find nothing to criticise I really like your work you are an amazing poet. 5/5 |
by kate
All i can say is...wow |