good story.

Wtf is Chris saying!? Anywho...very nice job. This poem is really intense, I liked it alot.

wow beauitful! although the spelling of dessert is wrong ..unless ofcurse u wanted t refer to apple pie,custard n stuff...otherwise it should be desert...and i think clatter of wings is supposed to be the flutter of wings...n way..loved reading ur poem::)

Thank you Truth hurts for your comments...its been corrected, thanks.

Clatter is there to stay however, as your suggested word "flutter" of wings. It was a play on words. If my dark angel was in indeed really an angel then yes I would agree it would be flutter...But that was the point he is not an angel he is some form of vampire or devil hence clatter. This angel I wanted him to be is indeed not!

Thanks again
Kind regards

Very nice, and thanks for reading my works. That was a very dark poem (thankyou Mr. States-the-obvoius). But seriously, astounding poem that was. I must say, had I a dark angel following me in nightmare, it would make me want for all the things you said. Great job, but I do have a question. When you said you like my elliptical style, what exactly did you mean by elliptical?

i think it hwas very profound i also was spellbound by the story line in a strange way. nice poetic flow 5.0

Hey Matthew

Thank you for your comment.
When I wrote I like your "ellipitical" style, I was basically meaning that your writing is very ambiguous, it has more than one meaning when read. To me that is!

Take care!
Hayley

Thank you for answering. And yes, multiple shades of meaning would be my intent. You have been added to my favorites list.

first, i'd like to thank you for the things you said about my poems. i really appreciated them.

and what i really wanted to say: this was such a utterly beautiful poem! the last to lines, i found especially touching. you have such an amazing gift. this is an amazing poem and i really look forward to reading more from you. please keep me posted!

How in the world do you get 1500 visits and over 40 votes in a poem that is only 9 days old? Man, I am jealous! I need more exposure...uh, well *blushes profusely* you KNOW what I mean!
Okay, I guess this area is for comments about YOUR poem (getting as bad as Lucifer and Chris with the gab, gab, gab): I again liked the premise. Vampires and seduction...yummy! But I would work on structure. Just a suggestion....

WOW I loved this poem! you are wonderful with words and i cant wait to see more of work!
.:*Yin*:..:*Yang*:.

Thank you Ash, for your kind words, your poems are fab im sure im not the only one that thinks that...Keep up the good work, look forward to reading more from you.

Kind regards
Hayley

This is amazing! I love your new poem! It's very creative and I love the subject of Dark Angel! this is really amazing! keep it up!

Love, Taylor

This poem is darkly beautiful. I find it full of hidden meanings( most of them relating to me) and a passion for the inner soul. I love it. I look foreward to reading more of your poems. If you have any time I have some poems (February and November) that you might like. Cheers Mercedes

Your poems always give me a loss for words, I would ahve to say this is the best one from you that I have read so far. Keep it up.
Now I am going to read part 2

Darkest Wishes,
Matt