I think this is my best poem in wuite sometime, so why do people give me 5's on my reletive crap?!? read this one, peoples, it's quite a nifty concept if you get it.

Slinky mate, slinky. Very good concept and yes, it is your best effort yet.

SP. Birch not birtch,

Though I know why you use the plural I'd go wo with breath over breaths as it can be though of as breathing as a whole.