by Eibutsina Sep 21, 2004
category :
Friendship, family /
family
Its like the amazing ocean flowing, |
Wow... Great poem.. I could see the things you described... And wow again very good... I bet your baby is the cutest things in the world... Though kids are nice when they can't talk but uhh wait till they do.... Cuz boy.. will they annoy you... Anyways.. again great poem... well detail and creative.. You obviously have a career in writing... remember me when you become famus.. help the little people out.. hehe joke Take Care |
by Semaran
From the second line i knew that this was going to be a great poem and i have to say you dare not disappoint, Fantastic truly brilliant. This is what i was waiting for Erisa and im so very glad i have read such sophisticated expression. I loved your use of effective metaphors and similes, the first verse took me on a wondrous ride of familiarity and exploration. I know there’s probably little I could say that hasn’t already been covered but I really felt the need to express my adoration for this poem. |
by FireCracker
OMG.. gave it a 5 you know it ! HAHA! lol .. Really liked this one two thnx for your new commts .. they mean a lot and i am glad you liked my newer poems. . lol .. ill email ya soon hope to TTYL .. ! BYE GURL .. ! |
by Chelsey
GEESH!!! man you got a way with words..As like the others im speechless too!! I mean that was so great! You said it so well and made me picture everything and every line and it was so heartful and warm..It was a ery nice dedication you and your son should be proud..I still am in shock i'm not sure what more to say,,,It was amzing Eirisa just like all of you other work!! Never stop with this talent!! Much love ~Chelsey~ |
by Kevin J
Eirisa, I would say I'm speachless, but I have alot to say:p. I'm really impressed. You know I love all your writes, but this might be my favorite poem of yours to date. What awesome tribute to your son. The discription and flow are impeccable. Rhyming is perfect. It's was well thought out. It had a nice smooth forward motion to an outstanding end. Reading this was like a breath of fresh air...no lie...you totally had me feeling the ocean breaze on beach in the summer, then carried me into autumn an so on...awesome comparisons |