Wow..that was awesome. I could feel the struggle into the night...the battle of good and evil. The feel of the entire poem was dark right up to the end where the light shown/Won

Very cool read!

Excellent write;)

This was another phenominal piece. I love the words you use. Especially the phrase "Green eyes blazing with lurid fire." I believe Chris pointed that one out as well. You write so well. I hope to read more.

Excellent story. nice poetry in motion!

“I'm surrounded by water, I'm in a boat. I shiver, the cool of the evening air tickles against my throat. A paralysed silence in my room tonight. Green eyes blazing with lurid fire. No escape from this fight”

I loved those lines, i could name alot more but those ones really said something. You write excellent, this is deffintley one of the greatest......Ca't wait to read some more!

Great Poem! the flow and movement are perfect to the point that it provokes you to keep on reading. keep up the great writing.

Love, Taylor

It was a good piece, but I didn't really care for the style (structure). I do like the writing, the words and the fact that it was told in story format.

you really, really are an amazing writer. i hope you get more up soon! cant wait to read some more from you!

<3 jenn

ps- i just put 2 more up if you wanter to read them.

very stimulating to the mind

I love dark story poems......so great, this is no exception.
Just as good if not better than the first.

Awesome