this poem is for the guy i'm in love with, please comment and rate it.

True love is felt here...may you keep writing and continue to express yourself so honestly!! Bravo!!

Sarah

I think you have good ideas in this poem, I like the feel I mean, "take me as I am" now that is what everyone wants people to know. Maybe if you fixed up the first bit of the poem "Since I'm just sitting here
Crying and holding fear
Northings worth it, northings real" I think the first bit doesn't fit because your sitting here you need to say why you are sitting here, because it doesn't flow good from then on untill the middle section. But once you fixed that bit up, it will be really really good, not that it isn't great already because it is!!

ur a great poet, keep it up hunnie,
ps: check out some of my new poems and thanks for your comment!
love swe3t xxxxxxxxx)