Fiery Darkness

by My Obsεssion   Sep 25, 2004


Written for a thread in a forum, thought I'd post it..
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Dancing flames
In the deep of night
A beautiful danger
That causes many a fright

Uncertainty creeping
In the deep of night
A friendly stranger
With a lethal bite

Wondrous allurement
In the deep of night
A virtuous ranger
With a heart full of spite

Coldhearted blaze
In the deep of the night
A hard-working granger
That is plagued by a blight

Deceptive elegance
In the deep of the night
A creative arranger
That just can't seem to write

Mesmerizing flames
In the deep of the night
With the ability to endanger
Yet such a breath-taking sight

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  • 20 years ago

    by Kevin J

    I like title...it fits the write. I like how you held to the structure of this write, seperating the first 3 stanza's from the last 3. Awesome Job;)

  • 20 years ago

    by Timothy r

    This was a fantastic poem, Natur eis where it should stay...Thanx for your comments on my poems as well..Keep up the great work. Love, Tim

  • 20 years ago

    by My Obsεssion

    Oh yeah I forgot to change the "an" to "a". It was like that because when I originally typed it up it was "an unfriendly stranger" but I wanted it to follow the form of the 3rd line being something good, then the 4th line turning it into something bad so I turned it into friendly. I just forgot to change the "an" to an "a" like I said, but thanks a lot for reminding me!

  • 20 years ago

    by PnQ Mod Account

    Great work! I really enjoyed this... and I think Nature is a good place for it. As for a title... maybe "Fantastic Flames" for an alliterated title Or maybe, "The Roaring Flames"

    Just one thing I see that needs to be changed... Stanza 2 line 3... Not sure what you were going for, but it needs to be "A friendly" or "An unfriendly"...

    other than that, it's an AWESOME poem!

  • 20 years ago

    by ChildofGod87

    ...Wow..the poem was passionate and very nyce:)...5/5 on the rate;)lol..!!! Keep on the writing!!!...
    ~Best of Luck to your poems!~

    **Luv Always Sedusha**

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