Very nice hun, the only thing that kind of picked at me was the flow seemed off to me, but it may have just been me. but i loved the message to it. i think everyone has those fears and wishes, i know i do (in the guy form of it)

5/5

I liked this. A lot, actually. While I do think it has the potential to be much better, the feelings and emotions seemed real. There is one thing I slightly dislike about it, however..

You started off rhyming, but then.. stopped. I really think it would flow a lot better if you made it rhyme throughout. Some of your word choices could be better as well.

Therefore, four out of five. [4/5]

``Briana