I like how a lot of your poems have a message or a moral maybe, at the end.

Excellent. My, am I glad to see that someone besides me grasped the true depth of philosophy and wisdom. Good job.

I like the message that you portrayed here, it is very deep.
The rhyming lacks originality and it seem forced. The flow is off in some places because of unequal number of syllables in lines.
I think that the problem is that you and me have too different views on poetry.

And the moral of the day is....lol. No seriously I liked this poem...interesting and unique in a way. Flow very rocky at times but the message made up for it....5/5 good work!

Life is what we make it, we hold our own destiny in our hands - fantastic job very true words 5/5 from me GG23

"or just walk away and be the best at what you do is true."

^^ I don't think ''is true'' is really needed in that line, it throws the flow off, and the poem works much better without it anyway.

Apart from that however, I liked this, I thought it had deep meaning and an insanely great message behind the written words.

Another great storyline, well thought out original piece of work, fantastic xxx alex xxx

Most people, when they write poetry about philosophy and life, they often just complain about what other people do. But you, you write about choices, and how we can choose to complain, or we can choose to do something about it, and learn from it. I really like this, it makes you think.

~Ashley

Well i think the second line you wrote

"and what is you ending goal"

i think you meant to write

"and what is your ending goal"

i liked this line alot:

"I say life is what we want it to be"

the flow was okay, it was a bit bumpy, but the whole idea was good...
it was mixed up with all the ideas, but i think thats what you meant when u named it "wisdom and philosophy"

but i think you should arange the ideas, and like i said, try writting in stanza;s it wud make it easier to read, and the stucture would look better...

overall it was good
keep it up!

I give you this you have a masterful way of viewing your life.-
raindrops 5/5

I liked the meaning behind this. It's very inspirational. I also, however, didn't really like the structure of the poem. You seemed to be a little muddled up here and there. Sometimes the rhyming seemed forced - remember you don't always have to rhyme. That's something I learned and since then I've been rhyming less and less, and it's wonderful to see how poetry can vary when you aren't being so strict with it.

The overall message was powerful and enlightening. Nicely done.