amazing! i love this one! it was like i was there. great poem!

That was very well writted. I really liked it. Great job on it, I can't wait to read more! :]

awesome poem, great work, 5/5

wow, i love it, every line is more tense than the last, really makes you feel! keep it up! luv kt.

wow.... that was awesome, keep u pthe amazing work

Nice job. Watch the capitilization of the I's because if you don't it detracts from the poem, this topic is very cliche, however. Keep writing!