very very good, Robert. I am sorry it took me so long to read this. Although "breadline" was the subject, and not what I was thinking, you turned it in a creative, very original poem. I think this is prob the best poem I have read by you!

wow, that was awesome. i really liked it.

oh wow thats a beautiful poem nd how it was for yourfather gave it more meaning!

Very creative Robert. Powerful and intriguiging (I'm sorry I'm useless at spelling)
Lovely write. Well done.
Take care of yourself.
All my love,
Laura.

This was good. Thanks for the comment but i do not want to change my poem as it is my feelings on that day. I only write what is in my heart. If i changed it it wouldn't be true to me :)

The making of the bread almost had religious connotations to me xx

Such a Heavy Message!!! 5/5 xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

It was kind of hard to follow in a couple of places, but it was really touching, it almost made me cry. the emtion was strong and raw, the word choice was excellent, and the message was clear, and needed to be made. You did an excellent job, very powerful.