When I needed you

This was a good poem, the same things I have sadi before still go. What I say now does not strictly go for this poem, but your writing in general. I think you should try widening your idea base a little bit. Instead of just love, and dark or sad poems (these aren't the topics I would like to categorize poetry in, but that is how they are categorized here so i will use these names) try expanding what you write upon. Even if you don't like what you write, or even if it means nothing to you specifically. One thing that brings me my topics is I ask myself what problems do people in the world have. Even if that problem is not specifically mine. If I believe that it is a problem that is universal (or differetn from other stuff of mine) and I have a good plot and setting to go with it then I try to write it. Like colors, I thought I had n idea people struggle with, and a decent plot and setting, so i tried it, but it didnt work out like i wanted. If you have writing about others' problems then think of it like this ( this is my philosophy on writing) THERE IS NOTHING NEW UNDER THE SUN. Period. All the major problems people deal with today (not necessarily the effects of the problems) have been around since the begining of humanity. So don't worry about not being able to write about someone else's problems, or not being original, nothing truly is. Also if you have trouble writing about problems you may not have, just put yourself into that position. Think, What would i do if I were in that position, cause human beings don't act all that much differently from each other. So the way you may treat and write about that problem is most likely the way someone else does as well. Hope this helps. I am not saying you don't already do this at all, I am just saying it helps, and may help you even more.

WOW! That's REALLY TOUCHING! AWSOME WORK! You really conveyed your feelings i'll vote in a sec- *5*DEFINATLY! EXCELLENT WORK!

..: Thanx for your comment :)! If you want, you can read the next poem i'm writing, before i post it. Anyway- Thankyou for the tip!:..

Luv KT

Heygurl how are you remeber me i sat beside you in comp. class well loved your poem
Love alway
Me

Very Good Poem i like it alot
cara

Alexandra, you need to calm down. You may want to see your dad but others may not. Ok not everyone is like you. Everyone goes through the same thing but handles it differently. If a father shows his child no love and abandons them, the child has every right to hate their father. You need to realize what you are saying before you say it. I can't believe you had the nerve to write that. You are right you do not know her so you have no idea what you are talking about. This poem had nothing to do with you, you shouldn't take it so personally, she didn't leave you a nasty comment about how you want to see your dad. Are you even in the exact same situation as her. If you can't handle other peoples poems and their thoughts then maybe you shouldn't be on this site. Respect others work and think about what you say first. And these people don't hate your father they hate their own, learn to differentiate (sp?) the two.