wow that is truly an amazing poem, and for your first especially. it was really beautiful, sad too, i really like it. it was intersesting cause i was trying to figure out while reading it who you were writing about, i like how you waited til the end to tell. nice work >5/5<
xxxChristinaxxx

wow that was amazin poem.....
im sorry abt the loss
but she will always be with u .. in ur heart (¯`v´¯)
always smile
peaceeeeee

that's an awesome poem... really really good... so sad i recently lost my grandaddy i wrote a couple poems about him (not very good) the newest one ("searching) my mom wants to put in the paper on his one year aniversary... awesome poem

hey love your poem it is another good one! check out my poem called (silent girl)
xoxox BJ

I am sorry for your loss...that must have been extremely hard the way you wrote about her....truly touching poem....shows how people turn to different things in reaction from a loved-one's death....and also the remorse felt....lovely job with the repetition and everything....

xxx

i love you poems never stop i can feel the pain and the sorrow i wish i could write like you but i know i never will

That is such an amazing p0em and u sho0d be very pr0ud 0f urself! its s0 deep and meaningful and im sure ur grandm0ther is in heaven watching 0ver u and very pr0ud 0f u. such a beautiful p0em, y0u're a talented writer, keep up the great w0rk!
i kn0w what its like l0sing sum1 u l0ve as i l0st 6 0f my friends in february this year (i hav 3 p0ems written ab0ut it, take a lo0k if u like.. Forever y0ung ;x is my fav0urite..)
i h0pe ur d0ing 0kay, ill be here if u ever need sum1 2 talk 2 ;]
l0ts 0f l0ve, maddy x0ox0ox

That was so well done. There was so much deep emotion. Keep up the amazing work.

Hey i lost my grammy two years ago and this made me cry so much because i miss her so and now it fells like the family is always fighting and all i want to do is bring her back to us love lots jenni xxoo

Okay, before I say anything else, I found a grammar mistake. Third stanza up from the ending of the poem, fourth line. It says "fight over antique dish's" where it should say "fight over antique dishes."
That being said, I thought it was a pretty good poem. There were parts of it where I felt that the rhymes were forced, and it just didn't feel right. I liked the flow of it. Other than a few minor things, I thought it was wonderful. 4/5

I have tried to write one about my mom but have not been able to. nice job