I give you a 5 for the format.. The rhymes are nice. (But does 'times' rhyme with the rest??) The repeats just fit so naturally... But the subject was a bit different.. Well, difference makes things interesting...

Well Trincy, the thing is it doesn't have to rhyme. Job well done although, ya sure this is a love poem? O.o feels kind of like sadness and depression rather than bubbly love ya know...
Aken Soll

time is a slant rhyme with the rest of them, i figured i'd throw in a slant rhyme for fun.

oh and if you were to look at the subcategory, it is in the lost love subsection of the love section

Dark, brooding, thoughtful, wistful, ravaged. I think this is great.

Sean, haven't been on in a while but going to look up some of your most recent poems over the next week..I thought this was great! I always admire the poets on here that make the effort to use different forms of poetry and rhyming patterns..mypoems are all more simple and really no format at all, they just rhyme usually!! Quite obviously, I'm an amateur!!! Great poem, will check out more as the week goes on...take care, Michelle :)

Good stuff my man. Flowed with a strong rhythm and i really liked the last stanza. In my opinion (even though I'm a poet with 4 days experience) flawless.