Ya i know wat u feel....i cant stop lovin this gal though she is like the devil...but then like some smart guy said "love's blind"

Another heartfelt poem beautifully written...i can't critisize on this one also...FIVE all the way...take care and keep smiling..

Dawn, your poems are so GREAT!

I like it, it's really just flat out truthfulness. You asked for criticism though, so all I have to say is that it has an odd flow to it. but, coming from me thats like calling the kettle black. keep writing and I hope you can get over this kid, i know how it is and its really hard.

Casey

yes it is and my bf yes

This is a very warm and heartfelt poem, it is written very well but I notice a few things which could do with cleaning up - I feel like the grinch for mentioning this but honestly, it's nothing major.

For example the opening line
My Heart broke(n) - or My heart is broken (I think moving the n works out better).

The only reason I mention this is because we do it but I wanted to try and be a little constructive. I think you have a great talent and I love your style of writing.

Keep 'em coming!