a very good poem, i can picture that scence, very dramatic. Great work

WHOA, this peom was great, sad, but great, your poems have such depth to them and i am glad that you decided to submit them to this site because I love reading your poems

Wow this is amazing..but so so sad:-( I could feel the pain in this..Excellent writting..Two thumbs up! Keep on writting:o)
Shanney

very well written, extremely dramatic... great work! 5/5

Hello Mate !

I loved the way u pictured ur Soldier! it was Fantastic indeed,n the title was very touchy as well as the writing .

what can i say more than Excellent !

u have great ideas n great way writing them : )

Peace,
Darla

by the way,Thank you for always commenting,that is extra supportove : )

Peace,
Darla

Awesome poem...you are on my faves list.

Hello mate ;)

Oops ! this was a real sad story ! it was really tragical :S ,But tell me who is that woman n the baby ? are they the soldier family or what? i didnt get it that much and what was that truth ?

but u did great pictureing that brave soldier : ) it was really nice,nice picked up words.

unique things u write about,always.

keep in touch n am waiting ur answer.

Peace,
Darla

Hello again !

mate thank you so much for all you comments n votes,i really appreciate them all,but tell me ? what is aka Shaun ? lol i knew that aka = the in Japanese ! is that true? are u Japa ?

lol,see ya

Peace
Darla

The man is a man who told the cops that he seen a young boy murdered. the woman and the baby are his wife and his daughter. They are grieving because he told the truth, that the group had him killed so he couldn't appear on the witness stand.

Aka means Also known As i am Dark Savior but i am Also Known As Shaun, which is my real name.

great i loved it. the story lione was brilliant. as for the comment u left me about the structure of my poems. do u have any advice because i've been trying to improve thew structure but i can't......... it would be realli appreciated for the advice. thanx.. oh yeah i like your work, i have been reading it , and its pretty good , i wish i could be that good, maybe one day with practice

i liked it....it kinda seems like jesus(not that ima christain or anything) but i liked man u should do more like that but darker i love it and i love it....srry

hugs and kissed
xoxoxoxox

LOVE it. great poem!! PLP

~lil slam~

hello again,i like this poem alotyou make something that my not be a true storey but yet you make it seem so really i could picture it all very dramatic i love it 5/5
xoxox Bj

I really like this one-it reminds me of everyone i know that's overseas... the great thing, as sad as it is, it's so true, and could be happening any day. but really good poem. i like :) 5/5