Lovely poem. Haven't read one like this before. I agree with Zoe about the sentencing, but that's not important. Great job.

I LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE YOUR POEM!!!! THIS POEM IS SO GREAT!! LOTS OF FEELING, GREAT WORDING, KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!
HUGS N KISSES,BLARG

i like this poem it is awsome!!!!!!!!!

wow....that poem is amazing...it's...wow, so powerful !!! I have tears in my eyes WOW ! Wonderful work, keep it up !!! Take care,
E.

very very good i loved it! its very creative and well written i hope you reach your goal! >>5/5<<
bec xXx

good god tht was one of the best poems ive read so far!

that was sooo good, keep up the awesome work, uv gt so much talent 5/5

A good poem and interesting commentary on events like Columbine. Seemed a little weak on his reasoning. Perhaps and event something to make him snap rather than awareness would have had a harder hitting 'cause and effect' notion.

But well written all the same.
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WOW that was really something I never heard of something like that. And just for a poet's mind its better to have a broken heart than a reagret worth everything your life.Keep up the good work just tel me f there is something to be done.Hope you read my mine also thanks!!!=)

It's a good story but the sentence structure and flow of the poem could use some work.

I appreciate honesty most of the time but now from you because you are like new to this site and its like who the hell are you telling needs work on a poem. Sorry but thats my view on your comment.
-Conner

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The poem's really good.. Keep up the good work.

Thats SO SAD! Brings a tear to my eye! Keep writing and not long till you reach your goal- with another vote of 5
keep writing! luv kt

oooooo!!! Conner your really good!

-Church

Wow, a powerfully sad story.

omg i love it and ur the same age as me... go us ... its beautiful and i love the moral as an ending
luv janice xoxox

You know that you are really great and u inspired me to be some1 like u and thanks for that almost 300 hehe. Gud luck!!!=)

brilliant poem well written creepy reminds me of the film elephant based on a true story scary how this kind of thing happens *shivers* anyway well done x x x take care x x x 5/5

this is so incredibly sad. there are 2 lessons i can see in it maybe more. this poem has the power to affect people. you did great!
*~*Soldier Lover*~*