i think its awesome! very good! i love how you paint pictures in the persons mind! hope to read more soon! keep in touch!
lexi lou

It's interesting.. And it's very dark.. I don't really understand it... But hey i'm very tired.. so maybe i missed it.. keep it up,, you have something here
Angel

Now the soil is the home
But all that was, is skeleton and bone
These were really good lines to end a very short poem! I am impressed.