by Robert Oct 16, 2004
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
I thought it was a love so true, |
I am beginning to see your style emerge from yourp oems now, i really love the way your sentences are quite long and are declaratifves sentectes giving facts xxx alex xxx |
by Jenni Marie
Oh how I loved that ending...so intense and powerful and filled with such bitterness and annoyance.. |
by JustKristina
This one shows ultimate feelings and emotions. The rhyming seem forced and i didn't like the structrure again. i'm sorry. but it was pretty good other wise.. :0] |
by Tammie
This shows a painful story of love and influence friends have on their own friends. It's hard when you have such strong feelings for someone and their friends don't like you etc. This line seemed a bit hard to read for me, because it had two 'said's; |
Honestly, I don't like this one. I can't see real emotions in it, rhyming seem forced and flow is off in some lines. My suggestion is that you should work one some unique metaphors and original ways for expressing your feelings. You don't have to listen to me, that's just my opinion and this is your poetry. |