by Mustardhart
Well written, beautifully expressesd. Good work |
Love the ending. Like the way you get into the mind more, but in truth I am not really one for love poems. Maybe it is because there are too many. The only ones I like to read are Poems about love that get into teh psychology of people after losing love--like The Raven. But the poem was good. Good rhyme scheme again. Your rhymes never sound forced that is good. |
by Gem
This one was very powerful to me.. |
by Marc Ortiz
Aw beautifully penned! well done! flow was good and oh yeah i love your originality! keep it up! |
by Vanessa
This one didn't quite seem up to your usual word choice, I mean most of it was pretty simple, but that worked here, really, the simplicty of the words was covered well by the power of the emtions. Another great job, another great read, keep up the good work Robert. |
by Marcus
Good poem |
by StormyStar
Your emotion is this poem is outstanding i lov it. |
Honestly, I don't like this one. I can't see real emotions in it, rhyming seem forced and flow is off in some lines. My suggestion is that you should work one some unique metaphors and original ways for expressing your feelings. You don't have to listen to me, that's just my opinion and this is your poetry. |
by Tammie
This shows a painful story of love and influence friends have on their own friends. It's hard when you have such strong feelings for someone and their friends don't like you etc. This line seemed a bit hard to read for me, because it had two 'said's; |
by JustKristina
This one shows ultimate feelings and emotions. The rhyming seem forced and i didn't like the structrure again. i'm sorry. but it was pretty good other wise.. :0] |
by Jenni Marie
Oh how I loved that ending...so intense and powerful and filled with such bitterness and annoyance.. |
I am beginning to see your style emerge from yourp oems now, i really love the way your sentences are quite long and are declaratifves sentectes giving facts xxx alex xxx |