by Robert Oct 16, 2004
category :
Dark, fantasy /
dark, horror
Head on the ground and body in the air, |
by Vanessa
Man the imergery in this one was vivid. I too felt like I was on a battlefield. Your flow was great, It didn't seem off to me, and the personaiftion you gave to the weapon, was a little diffrent. Nice twist, there. You did another excellent job 5/5 |
by None
well, I am seeing the same small problem in your poems,it can be easily fixed though...not all of the rhyming pairs match up evenly...like, one line will be 10 sylables,and the next 7...it kind of throws off the flow of the poem...when you write, try and think it out,sound it out, and write it out...that is what I do,I sometimes talk to myself to see if the lines go well with eachother. |
i love the detail!! and it was so....wow....i loved it.....really enjoyed reading it too!! 5/5!! |
by erikka baby
This poem was so dark and had a lot of details put into it. I loved the concept though. Your a very talented writer. xX |
by VampyraKiâ€
wow you capture the reader with the first words |