This was unique. Different which was good, a really great poem. Love Tara-Kay
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I agree very unique which makes it amazing :) i loved it 5/5 well done

Wow.. how haunting. What a way with words! Very well done. xx

Very different frm all da other poems i've read.
u've got such a unique style
i loved it =)

Definately a unique poem you have here, which is always refreshing to read. I loved the style in which you wrote this, it made the important parts more powerful. The speech of the girl definately added emotion and there was great imagery.
Excellent write. 5/5

Tammie

This poem is really nice!!
It was well written and well expressed!!!
Super sad, i liked it alot!!
Uhm.. The flow wasnt that good but it ws still an awesome poem!!
Keep up the gr8 work!!
A well deserved 5!!!
=)

Wow. The story you told here was captivating. I was hooked from the beginning and curious to know what happens next. It was deep, emotional and everything a dark poem should be. It was unique and interesting and I enjoyed it very much.

One mistake I found was
"Your dead now"
I think you mean "you're"

Well done *5/5*

I didnt get it? it was a bit counfused. well, there I go for not be so good at english ;)
But I liked it anyway. I like the sad ones. It makes me want to cry and I like to cry for things that is not my fault like Im bullied. well, you are a good writer :)

xoxo Meey

Omg this poem is really sad and emoional its really excellent keep up the great work please read my poems and tell me how you think

Amazingly creepy, loved it