by Dark Savior Oct 17, 2004
category :
Life, society /
other
I lay awake in my bed each night |
Woah..its awesome how u came up with a good piece like this one when u couldn't sleep..hhe.. |
You’re definitely not alone on this one….as I sit here writing this comment, it is 6:26 A.M. and I’m not nearly tired enough to sleep, yet again. I always had the problem of thinking too much (worrying too much that is)…I’d often find myself furrowing my brow unconsciously…from my worrying over just about everything, many what if’s and why’s and unanswerable questions and the future/past…and what a pain it is when you can’t shut up your own mind…which is the only time I have a problem shutting up. Now I have insomnia, and I can't sleep for more reasons than thinking too much... Enough about me...the poem is outstanding...I love it...truly.... |
very good, a little jumpy but very good. it's like several different stories in one poem. I enjoyed how it wasn't preachy but real and true. Keep on writitng, and I appreciate your comment as well. |
hey dude it is a great poem. i really liked it and i can actually agree with you that yeah i have a problem too. thinking about all of the things. like why am i here on this earth when so many bad things happen?? but then you read poetry especially poems like yours and it kinda puts everything into a new light. im sorry if i don't make any sense but i have problems communicating what i feel exactly. hope you understand. |
by shenoa
lol, i have to say, your one of my favorate poets on this entire site... i know exactly how you mean... laying in bed pondering the past, prestent, and future... somthing that anxiety and just plain being human does to a person. i lay in bed, hoping, wondering, wishing, believing, i lay in bed hoping for somethings, wondering about somone, wishing to be happy, believing it will happen some day... basicly.. your not crazy and your very inspiring... great write... i hope to read more. |