i liked your poem and enjoyed the rythem to it. It flowed along very well, it had some good fung shai. I think that you should cotinue to write.

I didn't give you five because i found that there was something abit missing, you didn't seem to seperate it into different stanza's and i felt like there were parts in it where you talked about something then when you started out talking about, i am not sure if you are talking about your life, your relationship, your family or what. I am finding it hard to figure that out.

All in all it's a good poem. Good job.