Thank you for commenting on my poems, i love to read "real" comments that help me. You don't get to many of them :). Anyways I really enjoyed this, because I had great visuals. I also liked how you made the character die at the end instead of being let loose. Instead he died in that cell alone withnone around, let loose by his own death. I thought this poem was original and very creative.

That was very mysterious and a very enjoyable write. One suggestion though. Maybe put it into different stanzas, because that way it wouldn't be so hard on the eye. I agree with Jacki Ford, it was original and creative just because the character died but that kind of "saved him." Very good job.
Satuxxa

thanx for commenting on my poem ^^ not many ppl do. I liked this, it was mysterious, and very creative. I liked how you didn't give away who or what they were. it was very good.

Indeed very mysterious...yet it bored me...Try using stanzas...

Still, good poem...

You have your very own style man...That's more than one can say about most writers here..

keep up the good work

I like it... a lot... ^^

ooh i like the way you wrote it. Very mysterious indeed! You do have your own style and unique talent. I write mostly about things that are in my life and experiences i have had. I've got one or two about nature and life. Most are about friendship and love, a couple sad thoughts. Anyways keep it up! read more when i have time. :)

not bad but not your best it seemed a little confusing and the rhymes sometimes forced.
~Freak~

This was very unique! My only advice would be to put it into stanzas to make it easier to read since it is a bit long. I think you could write some amazing dark short stories! ~Brooke~

once again it had a image behind it i really enjoyed it....and yea you should wite short storys they would rock..if you have any email them to me id really enjoy them..i also gave this a 5 x)

Certainly one of your more vivid poems, whcih made for an interesting read!

Keep Writing
Nici

i like the whole mysterious-ness (if that's a word) of the poem. i was kinda like 'hmm..' (in a good way) in a few parts, but i have to say, it's very interesting in its own good way. keep up the good work!

Interesting, and unique. Also, once again, very well written. :)

you must have had alot of time you have alot of poems and they are all good