You almost got a 4 on this poem, but when I read the last line, I really liked how it concluded so i gave you a 5.

Yes, I just love poems with a little surprize or twist at the end. It makes it more thoughtprovoking.

i agree w/ timothy, The last line really made the poem come together as a whole! You have powerful words.
i thought i would read some of your poems sence we've been going back and forth on the forum page. Anyways I really enjoyed this one.