I liked this, but it seems you might need to slow down a little and reword some, I especially noticed this in the last line. Not meant to be nasty, just a little help.

gud i liked it

this was pretty sad. but not a bad write. not your usual work though i think
~Freak~

okay job...4/5

Now I lay my head on a hollow shell,
feeling like I am in some Earthly hell.

i liked these lines :D

it was a great poem, it had alot of emotion and told a story a sad story but a story :D
i voted 5/5 x

It's Good. I felt that it could use some more work. There are grammar errors and So parts come together oddly. The rhymes are ok, I

It's Good. I felt that it could use some more work. There are grammar errors and So parts come together oddly. The rhymes are ok, I

In the beginning I thought maybe she died giving birth. Then, I thought she commited suicide. So what happened? Are you ok? Well the poem was good not great but In order for me to judge you as a poet I would need to read more of your work. So yeah I'm going to check out one of your romantic poems cause I could use a man who's good with words...