This is a good poem, and I hope that you continue to pursue in your Poetry, for then you'll get even better! I wrote a poem about a Teen's Suicide, called "Suicide." There are two versions. Anyways, I totally agree with what you're saying in this Poem.

that was one of the best poems i ever read because i can relate to it because i put on a smile to hide the pain i feel and no one but a few people know how i truly feel! i loved it!!