Touching De-void

by Kevin   Oct 27, 2004


How to frame them?
without over boxing needless parameters
points to make
make and take I cannot fake this
to shape razor-like will bleed understanding
it'll lose definition must include metaphor
be wise with them like Masters old
create from blankness a child I will
more than alone I in words could raise
by means conventional it comes from far away
you see?

my offspring now springs off
grown up in a flutter
ing blink of the minds eye
independent from Pen and I
this needless child needs nothing now
somehow
I do not know completely
the living form that breathes before me

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  • 19 years ago

    by FTS Miles

    Whether about a birth from the creative process or not, I still I feel like I should hand you a cigar and pat you on the back. Should I? There's something almost conflicted about the poem, and perhaps that's why I enjoy it a great deal.

  • 19 years ago

    by pinkalias

    ooo haha nevermind, i suppose yuo already explained what it was about...now i am embarassed that I viewed it wrong, o well. Still, excellent use of metaphor and symbolism. I do admire this piece

  • 19 years ago

    by pinkalias

    Beautiful. If i am not mistaken it is about a child growing up? or at least a metaphor of it, either way very well written.
    I loved your format, creating a rhythm to the poem that specified the more in depth and meaningful lines
    I loved your metaphors and comparisons. They really added an understanding and deeperaspect to the piece. Great job

  • 19 years ago

    by Jacki

    BTW i gave it a 4 :) nice job

  • 19 years ago

    by Jacki

    its like my poem rebirth

    pretty good i don't understand why you ended one line with flutter
    and started the next w/ ing

    was that on purpose?