WOW!!!!

good... if you did not have a dictionary sitting next to you then i applaude your vocabulary... keep it up

EXCELLENT!!(but i still like stupor better! heh heh) but 5/5 for your amazing metaphors

That was deep, and an excelent use of vocabulary. I know you heard this from the others, but still I think it was good. It was good except that it looked like prose. Toward the end it appeared to break up into lines, but at the begininng, it was just a paragraph, or so it seems. Anyway, keep up the good work, and I'm glad you give honest comments.

Your imagination is inspiring, and you vocabulary... Well, needless to say, I am almost speechless. Just barely though, or I'd never be able to say this. Well done.
P to the S; foetus not fetus. ;>

Ya actually i know i should not submit prose here....but since i am riting prose i do not want to put my stuff anywhere else....

Actually Belle fetus=foetus...it's the same difference

A wise man once said; "Great minds think alike"
A wiser man replied; "Great minds are fertilised by tortured souls"
I personally find the former less agreeable than the latter.

I wonder why?

Now i am getting used to this. So everybody knew that you are genius.. and i was a late realiser! Never mind.. Atleast i read your works now. Have you ever tried writting a book? You have a good vocab, and your imaginations are great. I like your style eventhough they are Prose. I am a kind of person who usually ignore prose or prose poems. But you made me stick to my seat and read your prose. If you have a greater theme, i am sure you will be a great writer. (May be many have told you this before itself..). I am happy that i read your work.
Trincy.

Thanx Everyone

Actually no ones told me thi before o waddya mean by greater theme

i lost my s's

wow......absolutly amazing. there are no words to describe how amsolutly talented this poem is. your choice of words and symbolism was impecible, and i absolutly love how you tied in words that were full of meaning and power. i have nothing but praise for this poem, it left me truly breathless. i also loved how you used the monster 'chimera' as your main effect. that was a powerful source of symbolism and imagery.
absolutly amazing, breathtaking. i look forward to reading more of you.