I think it's amazingly written...you did a wonderful job hunnie...loved it xxx
-Mortalidaga
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it is a good poem, and its a very original idea that the speaker IS Death Personified, but there could be a few minute tweaks to this to make it outstanding.

It was good and all, but the rhyming. The rhyming wasn't even there, the words fit in perfectly , but the rhyming isn't there. But good job anyway.

wow that was amazing, i loved it. Had so much emotion! Keep up the good work

uhm..ok...i read some of the comments and someone said that the rhyming wasn't there, well, i didn't intend for this to rhyme...i didnt really spend a lot of time on this..it was just a spur of the moment thing...but if you guys really feel that it should rhyme, then i'll work on it some more...but if you have any suggestion...email me....

I'm not the kind of peron that likes this kind of Death thing but if i did it would be hecka good! its kinda scary to think about someone killing themselfs becuase of misery cuz it can be taken aways!( the misery)

I think it was pretty good,nice wording and detail...... :)

hey
wow
that was awesome
it really gets you thinking about certain things
i loved keep writing

nice poem very very deep i loved it.....

Hey loved the poem... It was awesome... Also... If you like what i wrote you should watch an Anime called Berserk.. That's where i got the idea for the story i wrote.. It's really good... Anyways keep it up.. and take care
Angel

hhhmmm...thank you all for commenting..it really does mean a lot....

amazing poem! i really dont see what was wrong with it before, but its still great!!!

I loved it, oh and 2 more days. nnyar!!!! but really that was amazing, i dont know where u get your insparation, but mind throwing a little right there. lol.im having a writers block

You paint Death as wonderfully seductive... the way release should be to someone in emotional agony. You write with an informed understanding of it (unfortunately?). A few punctuative differences might help the flow of the poem, but regardless it's another wonderful poem.

This is such a clever poem. I really like the idea that death is the speaker. You would never think it to be a person ... Excellent poem. Definate 5.

you know no matter how much i have read that poem it has never appeared as clear at it does now, for some weird reason it is as if new doors have opened for me and i have a mental clearing, i can hear myself think. its nice