Nice, i was going to say that this poem looked like it might have been written by David to Armand, right up until the end where you reveal the narrator is a girl.

Nice job, i've read all Annes Vamp Chronicles...I love Louis the anti hero and without a doubt strongest of them all!

Keep it up.

Awesome job hun...Freaky...I liked it a lot...Keep writing...xxxxx

-Mortalidaga
xxTakeCarexx

Great poem. I really liked it... more than the other one, I think. It creates a wistful, yet dark mood... extremely beautiful. The only thing I didn't like was the last two stanzas. They didn't seem to fit with the other vivid lines. I suggest you work on that a bit, but everything else was excellent!

awesome, i love the horror/suspense type stuff. great story in the poem, good imagery. Peace -Luke

Wow very beautiful poem, really grasped the moment, but dont people usually die when they've been sucked by a vampire
kt xx

You and me both love vampires!! YAY! lol.

Honestly, I haven't read this yet, but I will, and then I'll leave a REAL comment, lol!! :-D! Thanks!!

This was a bueatiful poem, what is this book about that inspired you to write that? it must be a rad as book!
Any ways, like i said it was totally bueatiful and you have alot of talent and Your word use in the poem was wicked!
5/5
xox Bam

It was beautiful it mirrored the resplendence of Anne Rice's works
i loved the poem really really great
i have an obsession with vampires and anytime i read or see or hear etc anything concerning the creatures i go into a frenzy they are just great...
your poem was just great might i add i lovedd it...W0W