this was such a sweet poem. rochelle is a very luck gurl keep it up and cant wait to read more
luv ya hun
~giggles~

Aww. This is so sweet and beautifully writtern. i like the form of it and the ......s to show your hesitation and shyness. Lovely poem. take care. xmollyxx

so beautiful and so inspiring
i loved it!

Oh my gosh!!! Allen this poem is soo awesome! I can relate to EVERY word in this poem - cept for the "man" part.. lol - but seriously, I think I may show my boyfriend this poem.. because we were broken up for 2 weeks (my doing) and like.. wow, this just describes me perfectly!!! Great job! Keep it up and take care!

~Grace

Thank you to every one that commented on this work, I really appricate and treasure every comment that I get.

Giggles: Thank you for checking out my work... I edited the poem afterwards tho...
Chris: Thank you for alway leaving such an encouraging comment.
Molly: hehe, you got me, very nice of you to point out the ....s :D
Natasha: Thanks girl, Im still waiting for more of your work.
Grace: Thank you and I hope everything works great for you and your man :)
Nahla: Thanks girl, you take care of yourself okay?? :)

Very great poem! That is so sweet you feel that way about a lady and can write it out so beautifully! Very good job! You are such a great writer! Keep it up !
~*Take care!*~

Oh this was charming Allen and really stunningly written piece of poetry that was a true pleasure to read...do keep up the wonderful work I look forward to reading more of your stuff!

Thank you so much Lizzy, Some Girl and Eirisa :) Its a real pleasure to get comments from you all :D arrr.. that made my day :D:D

thats what this site is about isnt it? getting ureself to put down ure feelings in the form of poems and share it with the rest of us.
u dint give much thought to this one but its turned out really great! :-)
and thank you so much 4 ure comments...i appreciate it! :-)

hello ! as i promised ! here i am reading and commenting ur poem !! i must say that this poem is soething and my best part was where u asked her to be her man ! awww thats so sweet :D keep the good work :D toddles ! byee

aww allen ur such a cutie this poem was so incredibly sweet it made me all -sigh- was very well wriiten i loved it great job

Thanks megha, Kelly, DooDee, Friends~, Blondemoment and olivia :) I really love reading your comments :) You guys are graet :D:D:D Thanks again :)

Awaken by a creature that lurks in the night, crytal white lips kiss before I may wake, Poison touch therfore I shall die, slowly and painfully.. Nice touch, love that find what it needs to survive..

Er... Dear Ian... if you ever stumble upon this page again.. can you please tell me what your comments mean?? :) I feel a bit lost after reading it :)... its nice to read tho...

Hey that was beautiful, and there is no way it eserves anything less than a 5. I cant imagine how it must feel to have such excellent poetry written about you, exellent poem!
Take care,
Julie
-xx-

Very nice poem. while reading you can feel the words are so true. Well expressed. And good luck.
Love, Trincy.

OH MY GOD!!!!! Allen!!! My fairy godfather!!! I CANT BELIEVE I HAVNT COMMENTED ON THIS POEM!!! omg i feel so ashamed, so sorry for the late reply but thepoem was beautiful lyk all ur other work. roch is ver lucky, u seem very genuine. aleen u havnt been on for a long time now, missin you and your work! hope everythings aiight! luv ya xxoo, liss

This gets its way into my heart. It seems so... natural (can't find a better word)
I get the feeling that I'm standing behind you, watching as you explain yourself infornt of her.
Dude, good job, respect